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The ethics of re-writing someone’s personal story

When a famous actress writes a really personal piece about having a double mastectomy, is it ethical to do a detailed re-write to boost traffic to your own news website?

This is a tricky post to write because I could easily be accused of doing the thing I’m criticising. For this reason, I haven’t tagged this post with the actress’s name, I’m only mentioning her name when necessary, and I’m doing bad SEO (search engine optimisation) practice with my links – other than the link to the original piece.

That piece is My Medical Choice by Angelina Jolie, in the New York Times. You should go read it. I have no idea if the decision to tell the world was easier or harder than the decision to have the procedure, but I tell you what, that’s a pretty fucking tough year she’s had.

So. Given that millions and millions of people will want to read it – and that she wrote it for a particular news organisation, rather than, say, putting out a media release – how ethical is it for other news organisations to write their own highly-detailed versions so they get a piece of the traffic?

There’s no right or wrong answer here. It’s just an ethical question. What makes me uncomfortable is different to what makes other people uncomfortable, and regular readers will know that I probably think too much about this stuff.

Fairfax’s Daily Life writer Natalie Reilly has done a re-write, with a screaming headline that includes all the terms people would be searching for. It’s good SEO practice and therefore it’s good for traffic to dailylife.com.au.

However, it isn’t until halfway through Reilly’s re-write that she tells the reader the info comes from a piece in the New York Times. When you’re doing a re-write, that information should be mentioned – and hyperlinked – in the first or second sentence. No later. You need to make it very clear that you are writing about someone else’s work. These are the rules I stuck to when I was a journalist and they are ones I stick to now. On top of that, there’s so much detail in Reilly’s piece that there’s little reason to read the original. To me, that’s unethical. You might feel differently.

(Oddly, Sarah Berry has also done a re-write for smh.com.au, so they have two versions on their website. Berry’s is better, in terms of clearly and prominently telling readers to “click here to read Angelina Jolie’s piece in full” at the start and end. It also gives information about the procedure in Australia, so it’s not solely a re-write. However, I think it also gives enough information that readers won’t go any further. I’d be interested to see their stats on how many readers did click through to the original, but of course they will never release that info.)

Re-writes are common practice in newsrooms. It’s how you share another organisation’s work with your audience when you don’t have permission to use it. Wire services send them out all the time. I don’t think re-writes are necessarily bad, but you need to be clear that it’s a re-write. You also need to be really obvious in pointing your readers to the original, in a way that makes them want to go to it, and part of that is not telling the whole damn story in your re-write. Otherwise, you’re essentially just passing someone else’s work off as your own.

I don’t want to single Reilly out, because News Ltd sites also have re-writes of this story, but they aren’t bylined. The piece dailytelegraph.com.au was running this afternoon has been replaced by the news.com.au version. It’s worth seeing the story on dailytelegraph.com.au, just so you can see what happens when you don’t pay attention to your images. Just like the Fairfax pieces, News Ltd’s re-write also leaves the reader with little reason to go to the original. Plus they throw a million links and galleries at you to make sure you’re too distracted to leave the website. Clever, I suppose, but very messy.

Now, I’m not so naive that I think online news is just about reporting news for the good of the people. Of course it’s about boosting traffic for advertising purposes. I’m also not so naive to think that a story about Angelina Jolie and her breasts wasn’t going to make news around the world. But given the highly personal story she’s telling, a better approach would be to say “hey, here’s a few lines of it, go read what she wrote, in her own words and not in ours”. Yes, you still get the traffic, but you don’t look like a jerk.

The King’s Tribune is out

The July issue of The King’s Tribune is out, and you should read it. I don’t normally plug things here, but I really think The King’s Tribune is worth supporting – and not just because I sometimes write for them. It’s $8.95 an issue, or you can get a three-month subscription for $25 (less than a cd if you’re old fashioned and still buy cds. I still buy cds.)

In the July issue, Jane Gilmore interviewed Jonathan Holmes and George Megalogenis about why journalism isn’t dead.

Tim Dunlop writes about the real lesson of The Global Mail.

Jo Thornley writes about what we’ve all agreed on, as Australians (such as warning foreigners about dropbears, and menstrual blood being blue on tv).

Ben Pobjie has some handy hints on how to do journalism, or whatevs.

DragOnista writes about fear-mongers and politics.

Helen Razer writes about new journalism, newer journalism, old crap, Tom Wolfe and mummy bloggers.

Peter Hoysted writes about how busting cults needs political will.

Heath Callaway just wanted to write about zombies but ended up writing about how our political leaders represent what we have become.

Dave Gaukroger writes about online anonymity and nastiness.

Andrew Tiedt on the ACL and why we don’t like them.

There’s Damian Cowell‘s unreliable history of rock.

Justin Shaw on the evolution of cop shows.

Mat Larkin on mystery packages and children swearing.

Upulie Divisekera writes about James Cook, the transit of Venus, and astronomy in Australia.

Larry Stillman writes about the goings on behind Limmud Oz, the Jewish cultural festival.

Sunday Relish on carpaccio, and Fiona Katauskas asks, what would @Jesus do?

And there’s a piece by me on why we should care about the way the MSM treats Lara Bingle.

It also has Justin Shaw’s cryptic crossword, for people – like ManFriend – who can bend their brains.

All that for $8.95 is a freakin’ bargain! Hell, it’s less than a jug of beer at your local, and you’ll be helping to keep good writers from needing soul-destroying advertorial to pay the rent.

He’s, like, the BEST DAD EVAHHH

Hey look, another post about dads. Although, it’s not really about dads and more about hyperbole.

This is on the SMH homepage (which is how I saw it because, not being a parent, I don’t visit parenting sites):

Jason Lee photo of kids

Taping your kids to the wall is pretty funny

ManFriend showed me the picture on the weekend, so I clicked on it today hoping there’d be other photos of children taped to things. It’s proof of the saying I’m trying to make catch on, that today’s funny photo/video on twitter is tomorrow’s news story. (And no, it’s not about Jason Lee and Pilot Inspektor – which is quite possibly one of the best names ever.)

But check out the headline: Best dad ever takes adorable, crazy photos of daughters.

Now, this is not a criticism of Jason Lee. I’m sure he’s a pretty good parent, because most parents are pretty good parents. It’s a criticism of the headline written by an unnamed journalist. I mean, really, taking photos of your children makes you the BEST DAD EVER? Holy bajoley, what an easy gig Best Dad Ever is. I look forward to a similar article about how a woman who made dinner for her kids is the BEST MUM EVER.

Mind you, Essential Kids is also featuring a creepy gallery of photos to “celebrate” Suri Cruise’s 6th birthday – photos taken by photographers who harass the family whenever they leave the house; photographers who make money by selling images taken without the parents’ consent – so I shouldn’t really expect too much of the site.

Beyonce’s body and bad re-writes

I was going to blog about the constant policing of women’s bodies in the mainstream media, and how celebrity weight changes are now considered News, not just Entertainment News, and about how women are mocked if they don’t look sexually attractive throughout their entire pregnancy, and about how images of Beyonce’s body were examined to discover whether or not her “bump” was real, and about how a few weeks after having a baby, nameless journos have scrutinised her body for signs of weight gain and declared that since only her boobs are bigger, then she is sexy. But then I noticed something.

I noticed how similar the News.com.au and smh.com.au versions of the Beyonce story are. And I noticed how similar they both are to the original story on Us Weekly.

Some similarities are unavoidable, particularly when using journalese. (For a laugh, check out Words journalists use that people never say and the BBC’s paper monitor.) Journalists tend to use the same words, the same voices and the same angles when writing stories, so of course their stories all sound the same. They’re consistent. Predictable. Very predictable. After all, today’s funny tech stories were last week’s RTs on twitter.

But how much similarity is ok and how much is plagiarism?

This is all the Media Alliance Code of Ethics has to say about it:

10. Do not plagiarise.

Righty-o then.

Australian news sites run on re-writes from British and American tabloids. Without them, online journalists would have to, um, pick up the phone and make some calls and write their own stories. I guess it comes down to what what online editors think is important: getting your tertiary-educated journalists to chase stories that your competitors don’t have – stories that make your website a trusted, “must visit” news source, thereby improving your own job prospects – or getting them to bash out a few pars of the same shit that’s on every website.

But, to be fair, journalists in Australian newsrooms can’t be there in person to report on what a celebrity is wearing and whether or not they look fat/tired/like their relationship is on the rocks every time they leave the house, so re-writes are a necessary evil if you want to run these stories on your website.

So, the stories. News.com.au went for the SEO bonanza headline – Beyonce proves she’s already crazy in shape just one month after giving birth to Blue Ivy – but loses points for saying that Beyonce was “stepping out to support her rapper husband”. Unless she was performing a dance move, “stepping out” should not have made it past the sub.

During the concert, Jay-Z reportedly got choked up while performing Glory, the song he wrote for their newborn daughter.

Pay attention to that sentence. At smh.com.au: Woah mama! Beyonce’s post baby appearance:

Jay-Z looked visibly choked up when he performed Glory – the song he wrote for his new baby girl.

And from the original story at Us Weekly: Beyonce Reveals Sexy Post-Baby Body 1 Month After Giving Birth:

During the concert, Jay-Z got choked up while performing “Glory,” the song he wrote for their daughter, Blue Ivy (born January 7 in NYC).

This is also from the original:

Post-show, A-list guests hit up Jay-Z’s 40/40 club for the official after-party.

Knowles was clearly enjoying her night off, arriving half an hour after her hip-hop husband, 42, walked the red carpet.

And this is from the News.com.au re-write:

Following the show, A-list guests hit up Jay-Z’s 40/40 club for the after-party.

Knowles, 30, was clearly enjoying her night off, arriving half an hour after her hip-hop husband, 42, walked the red carpet.

Righty-o then.

How many journalists does it take to change a lightbulb?

Answer: That sounds like a good little story, can you email me the media release?

(For a giggle, check out What PR people really think of journalists. I’m guilty of a few of those things myself.)

The original title of this post was ‘How many journalists does it take to interview one person and then write 414 words based on an eight-page summary of a report?’. But it wasn’t very catchy. The answer, if you read today’s Sydney Morning Herald, is two.

The story: Strong support for wind farms obscured, says CSIRO report

The journalists: Kelsey Munro, Ben Cubby (repeat offender)

The report: Acceptance of rural wind farms in Australia: a snapshot (this CSIRO page has links to pdfs of the report and the summary)

The only quotes in the SMH story come from Jim Smitham, the CSIRO’s deputy director of energy technology. The story notes that Dr Smitham was “one of the reviewers of the report”. One voice is hardly a balanced story. And how does it take two journalists to get quotes from just one person? If they were journalism students and submitted this story for a news reporting assignment, they’d fail.

I asked the CSIRO’s media department if either journalist spoke to Dr Smitham or if the quotes came from a media release. The answer: no media release was issued, and Kelsey Munro spoke to Dr Smitham. So what did Ben Cubby actually do to warrant his byline on this story? We’re talking about an eight-page report that has lots of pictures, surely it didn’t take two people to understand it? Perhaps he emailed Munro the link to the report.

Baffling journalist behaviour aside, let’s look at the story itself:
A peer-reviewed study by Brisbane researchers investigated attitudes to nine wind farms in various stages of development in NSW, Victoria and South Australia, concluding there was a strong level of support ”from rural residents who do not seek media attention or political engagement to express their views”.

By contrast, more than half of all wind farm proposals had been opposed by members of the Landscape Guardian group, the report noted.

That bit is important, particularly when you consider the final sentence in the story:
The Landscape Guardians could not be reached for comment yesterday.

Right. Is this story time-critical? No, it is not. The report was released on 13 January. So there was no need for it to be published without comment from the Landscape Guardians. Hell, you could even go nuts and interview a third person in order to write a balanced story that was actually useful to readers. After all, Brendan Gullifer from The Courier in Ballarat had quotes from five people his 327 word story: Questions arise over CSIRO wind farm report. Sure, some of those quotes came from media releases, and the article is more about local politics than it is about the report. And it gives more weight to people opposed to wind farms than to the peer-reviewed report, but even with these flaws it’s a lot better than the incredibly lazy offering from the Sydney Morning Herald.

Update 19 Jan: So, Ben Cubby read this post. This is his response on twitter:

Tweet from SMH environment editor, Ben Cubby

Highly professional tweet from SMH environment editor, Ben Cubby

Stay classy, Ben.

A week of reports and I’m none the wiser

I’ve been following Simon Mann’s coverage of the US primaries in the Sydney Morning Herald for a week and I’m yet to learn a thing about the primaries. Is it just registered Republicans who are voting or can anyone vote? How many people are voting? Is it likely that those who vote in the primaries will bother voting in the presidential election? And what are the primaries anyway? How many do you have to win to become the presidential candidate? Or is it the total number of votes that count, so doing well in the big states is more important than doing well in the little states? And only today did I get a very brief sentence about what one of the Republican candidates actually stands for. Which is kinda weird because surely they all stand for the same thing, being in the same party, but I guess it’s different in the US and wouldn’t it be great if the Australian journalist assigned to cover this issue for an Australian audience actually fucking explained how it worked?

Today Simon Mann has 708 words in his story – Victorious Romney bites back against attack ads – and the first 581 are about who is winning in the polls. That’s 581 essentially meaningless words on the horse race, before he gets to information about the horses.

And by “information about the horses”, it’s just two sentences, 29 words out of 708, on what one of the five horses stands for:

He promised to cut the national debt and reduce the size of government, while eliminating regulations and repealing Mr Obama’s healthcare reforms. He also pledged to restore military dominance.

There isn’t a single word about how Romney reckons he’s going to cut the national debt. My guess is no journalist has actually asked him. You’d think that would be important, but naaah. There’s not a single word about how many jobs will be lost in Romney’s plan to cut the size of government, or about what areas he’s going to cut. And not a single word about whether the Republicans will have the numbers to axe the reforms and whether enough Republicans will want to axe them, and what it will mean for the general population. And what does “restore military dominance” actually mean? Does he mean nationally? Like using the military to respond to the Occupy protests? Does he mean globally? What country has more military dominance than the US? I DON’T UNDERSTAND HOW A SENIOR JOURNALIST THINKS IT ISN’T HIS JOB TO ASK QUESTIONS.

Yesterday’s story – Opponents take aim at Romney firm’s tactics – is 612 words of fuck-all information:

Mitt Romney’s commanding lead in New Hampshire has been pegged back amid stinging attacks on his corporate record, according to latest opinion polls, but the Republican Party’s 2012 presidential nomination is still his to lose.

So, you’d think the story would be about his corporate record, right? With the journalist doing some research into this record? Ha ha, don’t be silly. It’s 315 words about the horse race, then these two sentences:

The pro-Gingrich group known as “Winning Our Future” said it had set aside more than $US3 million to screen its commercial, which was cut from a 30-minute documentary made by a former aide to Mr Romney’s failed 2008 nomination bid. Portraying Bain Capital as a “jobs destroyer” rather than creator, the film depicts its principal as a Wall Street raider whose firm “destroyed the dreams of thousands of Americans”.

And then another 228 words about the horse race. A story that is supposedly about Romney’s corporate record contains just two sentences on what someone with a vested interest thinks of that corporate record, with no attempt whatsoever by Mann to verify if the claims being made by Romney’s opposition are true or not. This is some incredibly lazy reporting from a senior correspondent. If I was SMH editor Amanda Wilson, I’d fly to the US just to personally kick his arse back to Sydney. But that would require looking at the SMH’s stories through the eyes of their paying audience and snowflake hell and all that.

Do we need the mainstream media?

Yesterday, mrtiedt left a great comment on my This is not good enough post. The full comment is on the other post, but here’s an edited version:

This raises an interesting point – given there are many excellent sources for information (twitter, blogs, primary materials, those MSM writers who we applaud and value) this lowering in value from the MSM is perhaps not such a big deal… if the MSM is left to those people who can’t be bothered doing anything more than buying the same paper they’ve bought all their life, and the rest of us rely on news sources we trust and respect, is the denigration a problem?

It is an interesting question. One we’ve talked about before, but it’s worth re-visiting at the start of the new year.

My answer is yes, it does matter. But you knew I was going to say that, right? It matters because not everyone has the time, knowledge and internet access to find reputable news from other sources. It matters because newspaper reading is still the best way to increase awareness of public affairs, because when you flick through a newspaper you see all the stories, not just the ones you’re going to read (Schoenbach et al, 2005). This finding wavers when looking at election coverage, but I’ll get to that later. It’s worth noting that there is no evidence that news websites encourage the same level of civic engagement as newspapers (Lee, 2009). No doubt because, in Australia at least, news websites are nothing more than a collection of stories about accidents, stories about videos of accidents, stories about twitter, stories about celebrities on twitter, stories about sex crimes, and stories about turbulence on Qantas flights. News organisations don’t take their websites seriously, so why should we?

Back to why it matters. I’m gonna stamp my foot with indignation and say it matters because we shouldn’t have to go hunting for adequate reporting. If journalists can’t even do basic reporting – Who, What, When, Where, Why and How – then why the fuck are they wasting their time being journalists? Go and do something that pays better and has a more secure future.

Now, to any journalist who says audiences don’t want “serious” news, I say that just means the way you present serious news is boring. Consider this: a 2004 study from the Pew Research Centre for the People and the Press found that 21 per cent of 18-34-year-olds learned about the presidential campaign from Saturday Night Live and The Daily Show with Jon Stewart, which is almost equal to the 23 per cent who got their campaign info from network news (Feldman, 2007). What makes this very interesting is that the National Annenberg Election Survey revealed that Daily Show viewers knew more about election issues than newspaper readers and tv news watchers.

There is no reason why news can’t be informative and entertaining. And no, that doesn’t mean turning news into a jokey re-write of a media release or putting an infographic into a story that has been written in the usual dull as dogshit way, interviewing the same people and pretending there are only two sides to the story and they are “slamming” each other. If that’s the best you can do, then please change careers and save the rest of us from your mediocre vision.

References not linked to in text:
Feldman, L (2007), ‘The news about comedy: Young audiences, The Daily Show, and evolving notions of journalism’, Journalism, vol. 8, pp. 406-427.

Lee, C (2009), ‘Pixels, paper, and public affairs: a comparison of print and online editions of The Age newspaper’, Australian Journalism Review, vol. 31, no. 1, pp. 91-104.

Schoenbach, K, de Waal, E, & Lauf, E (2005), ‘Research Note: Online and Print Newspapers: Their Impact on the Extent of the Perceived Public Agenda’, European Journal of Communication, vol. 20, pp. 245-258.

This is not good enough

One of the frustrating things about most mainstream media reporting is that it fails to give readers the basic information about the story. A few days ago, Andrew Elder wrote a great post on the banality of political reporting, and this quote stands out:

The mainstream media isn’t giving us the information we need because it can’t be bothered.

I’ll add to that: journalists all do the same thing and so they haven’t noticed that what they do – get media release, call someone who is going to criticise it, make sure juicy quotes are at the top – results in a story that only looks balanced to a journalist. In political reporting, of course the shadow minister is going to disagree with the minister, so put that quote right at the bottom and use the important space to explain the information and speak to experts. You know, those people who are not politicians. Yes, it will take more than the 10 minutes it currently takes to read the media release, email a few generic questions to the minister’s media office because if you get a quote that isn’t in the media release you can put your byline on the story – although that doesn’t stop many online journos putting their bylines on re-written media releases. It’s about whether you want to be a good journalist or if you’re happy being a mediocre journalist.

(And while on the subject of political reporting, wouldn’t it be nice if this year, Fairfax and New Ltd editors told state and federal politicians that they will no longer publish quips. That unless a politician gives a serious answer, they will not feature in the day’s news because they have nothing worthwhile to add. Ah, I’m a dreamer, eh?)

In journalism courses you are taught to always ask the five Ws and one H: Who, What, When, Where, Why and How. The Why is almost never asked in modern journalism, usually because it requires big picture thinking on the part of the journalist, to see how this current announcement fits in with other announcements. But the What is also a casualty of modern journalism.

If any j teachers want to hang on to it, today’s Sydney Morning Herald is a good example of what not to do.

On the front page is this story by Simon Mann: Romney wins Iowa caucus by eight votes:

MITT ROMNEY has taken a first, tentative step towards the Republican Party’s 2012 presidential nomination, clinching victory in the first ballot by the narrowest margin ever – just eight votes.

The one-term Massachusetts governor, long considered a frontrunner in a relatively weak field of candidates, pipped a fast finishing Rick Santorum, the former Pennsylvania senator and deeply conservative Christian, in Iowa’s famed caucuses.

In 729 words across pages one and six, there is no explanation of why Iowa’s caucuses are “famed”. It’s a story about American politics for an Australian audience that doesn’t even explain why this event is important. That is a basic journalism fail.

Another front page story – Millions wasted on Aboriginal job projects, by Anna Patty – is based on a report but doesn’t even name it. It also mentions a second report, but again, no name. What is the story about? It’s about a report. What report? I don’t know. So it fails the What requirement.

I’m going to skip to page five here, because it’s a page that keeps giving and giving, and who has time to read a critique of every story in the paper?

A story by Jen Rosenberg about students who did well in the International Baccalaureate – ‘Intellectual freedom’ pushes students to top of the class – doesn’t explain what the International Baccalaureate is. How is it different to the HSC? What subjects are offered? It’s an international program so how are these subjects taught? How are they assessed? Do they sit exams at the same time as the HSC exams?

Louise Hall’s story – Ex-Scottish baron convicted of murder plot invokes ancient law in release bid – doesn’t adequately explain this “ancient law”:

THE former Scottish baron Malcolm Huntley Potier, who is in jail for twice plotting to murder his former de facto wife, has launched a fresh attempt to gain his freedom under the ancient law of habeas corpus.

The only explanation of habeas corpus is this:

Representing himself, Potier said he was seeking the issue of writ of habeas corpus, a legal action from 17th-century England through which a prisoner can be released from unlawful detention, after his most recent bail application was refused.

It is taken straight from the first sentence on Wikipedia:

Habeas corpus (Latin: “you may have the body”) is a writ, or legal action, through which a prisoner can be released from unlawful detention, that is, detention lacking sufficient cause or evidence.

Definitions straight from wiki or a dictionary happen, and sometimes the way it’s worded is the best. But are you any wiser about what’s going on in this story? I’m not. I think what’s happening is that, despite being convicted, this guy reckons he should be let out of jail while he tries to prove there was a miscarriage of justice, and the law allows that to happen. That doesn’t seem right, otherwise everyone would be doing it. And if it is right, then the story should say this. I shouldn’t have to read a news story several times, and go elsewhere to work out what the term the whole story centres on actually means, in order to get a vague understanding of what’s going on.

Ben Cubby’s story – La Nina whips unseasonal weather into a wet frenzy – doesn’t even explain what La Nina is.

And still on page five, this story by Saffron Howden is a media beat up: No policy to restrict killer’s access to passport or licence:

NO GOVERNMENT agency sought to restrict killer Trent Jennings’s access to passports or licences before he was allowed out unsupervised of a psychiatric hospital on day leave.

OH MY GOD THE GOVERNMENT AGENCIES FAILED TO BLOCK HIS ACCESS TO THESE DOCUMENTS! Er, no. The spokeswoman from the Department of Foreign Affairs and the spokeswoman from Roads and Maritime Services both said prisoners are entitled to passports and licences, just like non-prisoners. But that didn’t stop Howden or the sub sensationalising the story to the point of stupidity.

So, what do we – their audience – do about it? Not buying the SMH isn’t going to work because I’d rather kick myself in my own vagina than read News Ltd publications. Instead, every time you read a news story that is inadequate, blog about it. Tweet about it. Use the hashtag #journalismfail. We are their audience and we demand, at the very least, adequate fucking journalism.

MSM finds the big stories just too damn hard

The most important story on the News.com.au homepage at midday is that a former Playboy playmate walked past the striking Qantas workers. Seriously. This is their main story. You can’t make this shit up:

A former playmate near striking Qantas workers is Big News at news.com.au

A former playmate near striking Qantas workers is Big News at news.com.au

And if you clicked on the Kendra Wilkinson link and saw the photo of her at the airport, despite the nonsense that she “lifted their members”, I’d be surprised if anyone knew who she was. Unless the Telegraph journo (who wrote the story) told them, simply so he could link her arrival to the Qantas story. You know, I’ve always thought that the striking Qantas workers story could do with some boobies.

By the way, I loved that the Hamster guys last night laughed at news.com.au’s laziness with this story: Help us decode the carbon law:

IT HAS 18 pieces of legislation, making up 1129 pages and 255,539 words.

And it’s the most important change to Australia’s laws in decades.

At news.com.au we want you to help us sift through the fine print and tell us what you think.

So take the time to go through the bills – there are links to them all below – and let us know what you find.

It’s SO IMPORTANT that not a single journalist at news.com.au was told to read it. Getting your audience to read legislation for you because you couldn’t be bothered is hardly the data journalism that The Guardian used to investigate 458,832 pages of MPs’ expenses. And we all know that’s where they got the idea. Well, they got the idea but they missed the point.

But I should be even-handed in my pointing out of dumb journalism. The Herald Sun had one of their journalists get a “body language expert” to comment on a photo of Julia Gillard and Kevin Rudd. (And other than talking to journalists, what do body language experts do? Is it like therapy, but instead of talking about your stuff you show a video of someone else doing something?): Cold comfort in kiss between Gillard and Rudd:

IT was almost like she was kissing a blow-up doll, a body language expert declared of yesterday’s kiss between Julia Gillard and Kevin Rudd.

Dig at Gillard’s private life, check.

Allan Pease, who co-wrote the “Definitive Book Of Body Language”, said both politicians were trying to put on a positive show, but the gesture appeared too thought-out and lacked genuine warmth.

“The whole thing is awkward,” Mr Pease said.

You know what’s really awkward? Convincing people you’re a real news organisation when you run dumb stories like this.

Who gives a shit if Gillard and Rudd like each other or not? Do you like every person you work with?

According to the story, Rudd was holding a “bundle of paperwork” in one arm so he went for a handshake. What the story fails to mention, but you can see it in the video, is that everyone was hugging and kiss-on-the-cheeking:

Mr Rudd initiated contact with a handshake before Ms Gillard converted it into a full-blown embrace.

But instead of a heartfelt hug Mr Pease said the PM squeezed her former boss’s shoulders in a holding-like grip.

Ooh, “former boss”, nice little undermining dig there from Wes Hosking. And besides, aren’t all grips “holding-like”? If you’re gripping something, you’re holding it. And to me it just looks like a normal hand on the shoulder (but I am not a body language expert, of course):

A normal kiss on the cheek becomes THE END OF THE WORLD at the Herald Sun

A normal kiss on the cheek becomes THE END OF THE WORLD at the Herald Sun

If you don’t put your hand on the other person’s arm, then it just dangles awkwardly by your side.

Ms Gillard pushing her hips away from Mr Rudd was a further sign the pair lacked an intimate connection, as was her closed-mouth smile.

“Women do that gesture in situations where they feel really uncomfortable,” Mr Pease said.

I’d hate to work with Mr Pease who thinks that a kiss on the cheek between colleagues requires a crotch thrust and grind.

“If you’re with some bird and you’re trying to impress her and she’s got the expression Julia Gillard’s got, you kind of know you’re bombing out.”

Um, Mr Pease, you do know they’re not dating, right?

Removing the criminal

Today in our ongoing discussion of how the culture we live in says that violent crime is something that “just happens” to women, we have the second most important story on smh.com.au removing the criminal from his crime:

According to smh.com.au, women just get themselves slashed

According to smh.com.au, women just get themselves slashed

Here’s a close-up because, frankly, my eyes aren’t that good:

A close up of the story

A close up of the story

Second only to a story about a store offering cheap phones is this: Sleeping woman repeatedly slashed at home:

A woman has been woken by an armed intruder who slashed her head, face, arms and legs with a blade in her western Sydney home.

The intruder is the one who did the thing that is newsworthy. Yet the reporting almost completely removes him from his crime. When you read the first sentence, you notice the woman and her injuries, but the attacker is buried in the middle. It also makes it seem like the worst thing that happened was that she was woken up.

If you want to keep the details of her injuries in the first sentence, it should read something like this:

An armed intruder has broken into a woman’s home and slashed her head, face, arms and legs with a blade.

Or you might want to go with something like this:

An armed intruder has broken into a home and attacked a woman with a blade.

It might seem like a small thing, but it’s really important. And apologies to people who already know this, but we’ve had a few new readers lately. We live in a culture that believes it’s cool to say things like “I’ll make you my bitch” and “you totally raped my eyeballs with that picture”; a culture that uses the threat of being raped in prison as a deterrent (ignoring the fact that people in prison are already being punished for their crimes); a culture that says women should do a hundred things/show common sense/take responsibility for their actions so they don’t get raped; a culture in which journalists remove the perpetrator when they report violence against women. This is known as rape culture. Before you send in comments saying “bullshit, our culture does not say it’s ok to rape”, I suggest you read this first.

Back to why it’s important that journalists start thinking about the words they use. As Wahl-Jorgensen and Hanitzsch (2009, p. 3) write:

news shapes the way we see the world, ourselves and each other. It is the stories of journalists that construct and maintain our shared realities.

When every story about violence against women starts with “a woman was” (instead of “a man did”) then, as a society, we believe that violence is something that happens to women. Like periods. Many first sentences don’t even mention the perpetrator at all, giving the impression that violence is just this disembodied thing that will happen all over you if you step too close to it. (And then, of course, what were you doing stepping near it in the first place?)

Unless we personally witness it, everything that happens in our world that is considered newsworthy is filtered through the eyes – and the words – of journalists. But journalists, in general, don’t give a single thought to the words they use. They are just following the pattern, the structure, that they have been taught and that gets replicated over and over in newsrooms and journalism courses. I don’t believe that it’s intentional – they’re just writing the way that everyone else writes.

After I tweeted about it, I got this response from Stephanie Gardiner:

tweet from stephanie gardiner

The power of twitter

The headline was changed to “Intruder slashes sleeping woman in her home”. We call that a win. Of sorts. There is still the matter of the first sentence.

Reference:
Wahl-Jorgensen, K. and Hanitzsch, T. (2009), ‘On why and how we should do journalism studies’, in The Handbook of Journalism Studies, Routledge, New York, p. 3.